Breathless

by Erin Merrill
First Place Scenario (middle division) at IC2000
Cocoa Beach High School
Coach Marianne Solomon



 “Galí, why do you care?  You’re first chair in the United Orchestra!  Quit your complaining!  Just because Molori Davys didn’t say hello in the halls is no reason to push yourself like this,” Bepov said, words bouncing with the fall of her feet on the treadmill as she jogged.
 Galí turned to her best friend,  “I want to feel included, You know how I get if someone doesn’t like my work.  I never sleep, eat, or even think until the problem is fixed.  This is just another on of those problems.”
 Generally speaking, Galí Hartford knew herself.  Chinese-American, prize poetess, first chair violinist in North America’s Holographic United Orchestra, and a young girl with a drive to please.  However, this knowledge meant nothing to those peers she tried to impress daily.
 Bepov turned off her machine and swung a towel around her neck, sweat glistening like stars in the night sky all over her chocolate, finely muscled body.  “This isn’t just a problem like poor grammar or a wrong note.  Galí, this is your body that you’re ‘fixing’.  I think it’s a big mistake, what you’re doing to yourself.”
 Galí turned up the pace on her stair-stepper and began straining to pound the bars down.  “I don’t see what the problem is. You exercise, too.  You’re in better shape than I am, so I have work harder to get to your level.  Once I’m there I’ll slow down.”  Words strained with the young woman’s throbbing muscles.
 “At least take off that rubber suit.  I know it’s in style and everything, but it’s not healthy to wear when exercising.  There have been stories on the news and stuff…”
 “I’ll be fine. Don’t worry.  It’s just until I get my body fat down and my muscle builds up!  I have to be in shape, or else Molori will never talk to me again.”
 Bepov looked intently at her friend.  “I don’t see why her opinion means that much to you.  But if it does, genuinely, mean that much to you, and this isn’t just some stupid phase or anything, I’ll support you.”
 Galí smiled at her friend.  “Thanks Bep.”
 “I’m gonna take my shower.  See ya.”

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Galí swung her gym bag off her shoulder in the entryway of the small, spartan apartment she shared with her mother.  She was proud that after the five-mile jog home from the gym she wasn’t as tired or as out of breath as she had been the past week.  White teeth flashed in a quick smile at the thin girl’s reflection in the hall mirror before she ran into the shower.  A quick stream of scalding water readied her for the intense violin practice she forced herself into every day.
 Before her lay the sheet music she so loved to just sit with and ponder.  Raising her favorite violin (a cherry plastic that was very expensive in the online mall) to her shoulder, Galí took in the smell of the plastic hardener, noxious to others, yet the finest perfume to the young genius, and voiced her pass code into the small transmitter on the neck.  She took great pride in the silences that followed; her instructors at the United Orchestra headquarters even loved to hear her practice.  Assured that the transmitter lights were dim enough to concentrate on her science, she raised her bow in ready position and aided the violin in singing her first note.  It was clear, crisp note, nothing unusual to the casual listener, but to Galí it meant much more.  When she played she felt like her soul was flowing through her hand to her bow to the strings and enabling the strings to come alive – to dance and incredible dance that she only could see and hear.  When she closed her eyes, so in tune to the violin that she could play the strings without looking, without really even thinking, she imagined that they were the dearest of girlfriends.  When the song was fast, they were giggling about some boy that had flirted with them.  When the song was slow, their conversations led to much more somber subjects.  Galí breathed through her violin, and she believed, into the farthest reaches of her mind, that it breathed through her.
 Exhausted and sore from her practice, Galí awaited her instructor’s judgement.
 “Galí, that was beyond incredible.  That practice was, in itself, better than the entire orchestra on its best day.  You’re going to become a legend!  Have you started your overture yet?”  Her instructor’s awe was audible.
 “The overture is done, but it still needs some work.  I’ll scan it to you next week.”
 “Galí, you’re amazing.  Go get some sleep, you deserve it!  And no more of that Ultra Exercising you kids are all doing.  I know it’s the ‘style’ or whatever you children call it, but you can strain you muscles, and if you hurt those arms…”
 He didn’t need to finish his sentence.  “Yes, sir.  No more Ultra’Cycing.  I promise.”
A click and the connection was broken.  Galí carefully placed you soul mate in her case, put the sheet music away, and went to the kitchen to make dinner.  Her mother was due home soon, and she would be mad if supper wasn’t ready.

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“Oh my goodness, Gally, Sweetheart!  What have you done to yourself?”  Molori asked, shoving her way through the crowded hallway at the high school to get to Galí.
 “Oh, hi, Molori.  I stopped Ultra’Cycing for a while.  My violin instructor doesn’t want me injuring my arms or anything.”
 The tall, unbelievably muscled young woman named Molori straightened herself to her full height and fixed her backpack over her rock-hard shoulders.  “Really?  That’s too bad, I was having a party this weekend, but I think I have too many people as it is.  Call me if you start working out again, maybe I could squeeze you In.”
 Galí watched, mouth agape, as Molori strolled off.  She could feel the tears building up in her eyes.  She felt lost, alone as the crowds in the hall thinned.  She yanked the nearest books out of her locker and ran into the closest restroom where she cried her almond-shaped eyes out.

*                    *                     *

“Galí, I thought you said you weren’t doing this Ultra thing anymore!”  Bepov Rushed over to the machine where Galí was madly pushing herself.
 “Well, I felt flabby and disgusting and depressed, and I just felt like getting away.”  She breathed the words as she struggled for breath in the tight rubber suit.
 “Don’t you usually go to you violin for that?  And what about what your instructor said?”  Bepov turned on the vacant machine beside Galí’s and began climbing to nowhere.
 “I figured as long as I didn’t lift any weights or anything my arms would be fine.”
 Bepov stopped for a second to look at her friend.  The friend she had slept next to in the hospital nursery room, had grown up with, and had become best friends with in the course of their short life times.  The friend who was now changed beyond all recognition, save for the needful look in her sage-pigmented eyes.
 “Galí, stop for a second and look at me.”
 Galí turned her head to look at Bepov while beating at the steps at her feet.
 “NO, STOP!”
 Galí slowed her stepping until the machine slowed.  She turned to look at her friend, as did half the gym.
 “What are you doing to yourself?  You are in far better condition than I am, and yet you push yourself here, day in, day out.  Your mother says you’re not practicing you violin as much, and here you are disobeying your instructor, the one you once told me you’d kill yourself for if he only asked!  What is going on with you?”
 Galí started crying.  “Nothing, Bepov.  Just go away, please, I’m trying to concentrate on my counting.”
 “Bepov? Since when do you call me Bepov?  It’s been Bep for seventeen years.  Since we were babies, Galí.  Why do you even care what Molori thinks? She can’t even pronounce you stupid name right!”  Bepov grabbed her gym bag and tore out of the room, her tears shining down her cheeks in a rain of emotion.
 Galí stepped off the machine in a daze and walked over to the new UltraMachine.  Not paying any attention, she quickly sat down, stuck her feet in their weights and strapped on her arms and lifted her legs.  A cracking sound emitted from her right arm as a wave of pain radiated from her elbow.  She realized with horror she’d forgotten to computer adjust the weights.
 Her arm was numb and someone close by was screaming at the top of her lungs.  Before slipping into shock she realized it was she…

*                    *                     *

Days drift by like years
Without you
And I cry, hope, dream
That one day we’ll talk
Again
You have left me broken,
Breathless

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